Seeking to comfort my darling Caleb and to stay hopeful, I mumbled the words
“The Lord is my shepherd I shall not want, He makes me to lie down in green pastures ..” with each word I willed God’s presence to fill our minds like it did every night as we prayed in John’s tent.
Echoing through the murky, cold tunnels of the holding dungeons,”Cease your heedless prayers woman, your god has laid you down like sheep for slaughter and Hades will eat his fill of your filthy soul.” His voice filled me with fear.
Written for Friday fictioneers a writing challenge hosted by Rochelle. The picture was provided by the lovely Peter Abbey the task is to write a 100 words story inspired by it. Thanks Rochelle for hosting the challenge. Thank you for stopping by… do click on the link to read other stories.
Hello, this is quite a dark, grim story, and the desperation of your character comes through.
I’m not sure about your first line though, did you mean to put, “and to stay hopeful,”?
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Thank you so much.
Made the correction now.
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Dark and scary ending. It’s a beautiful Psalm and to comfort her child (I think?) it’s a good one, but often I find they use it in scary scenes in movies so much, for me it almost has the opposite effect. I think this happens in your story. I love the title though, that hymn is very comforting.
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It is a lovely hymn happy you caught the reference to it.
And yes she is trying to calm her child.
Thanks Mandi!
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Chilling, great use of the psalm adds to the atmosphere. Their jailer is terrifying. Good story.
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Thanks Iain!
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deep. dark. dreary!
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Thanks Rose!
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you’re welcome! 🙂
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Well, praying and singing worked for Paul and Silas, so it’s definitely worth a try.
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Yup it is!
Thanks Russell!
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Dear Chioma,
The thick darkness is tangible in this piece with a glimmer of light from the 23rd Psalm. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle!
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Very dark, I hope she ignores her captor and stays true.
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Sorry for the slow response.
Thank you!
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So very sad. And very cruel of the other character to dash her beliefs in this way.
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He is a wicked jailer!
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Great job. Exactly how I imagine the jailer would react…
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Thanks Dale!
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Very dark piece and there doesn’t seem to be a happy ending on the horizon
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Nope there doesn’t seem to be one!
Thanks Michael.
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(Hades we eat his fill of your filthy soul – did you mean “will” eat? If not ignore me.)
This is a desolate piece. Well done.
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Thanks Alicia, will correct it straight away!
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This is very scary and dark. I hope she and her child can keep some hope.
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I hope so too!
Thanks Gabriele!
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