April four, 1954 marked the beginning of my journey on earth.
The second child from my father’s third wife, thus my birth wasn’t significant. Not being a son made it even worse, father took one look at me and stalked off into the bushes. Mother called me Nkejika, father called me Odiozo, I guess he was starting to accept the gods had caused his seed to never rise as planters only incubators.
Mother said he would learn to love us, my sister accepted it, but I couldn’t wait for the day when he gushed over me in love. I woke up every day hoping it would be that day.
I went hunting by myself, I laid the bounty at his feet. He mumbled his admiration.
I went to the maidens dance, the prince took an interest in me, not the heir to the throne, though. Father proclaimed his approval, I was indifferent.
I’ve spent every step of my life reaching for love, who’s to say this won’t be another level of deferred love?
Arrrrgghhh! I am so not feeling this story.
In response to the writing challenge flash fiction for aspiring writers hosted by Priceless Joy click on the link to visit the blog. The photograph is from the lovely Joy Pixley (interesting photo can’t wait to see all the stories it inspires) and the challenge is to write a 100 – 150 words (+/- 25 words) story inspired by it. Do click on the link for other stories.
hahahahaha I am also struggling to come up with something.
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Haaaa!
Good to know I’m not alone.
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A good story with many layers. Nicely done.
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Thanks Yarnspinnerr.
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I like the way you took the prompt and used it a s a metaphor for ever reaching for love. Well done.
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Thanks Iain!
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Liked the take on the prompt and the metaphor
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Thanks Dahila!
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Poor girl! She has always been reaching for her father’s love and never really getting it. Seems that sadly bubbles over into her relationship with a man. I find it interesting how the photo prompt brought you this story. Great story!
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All I could see from the story was someone trying so hard to reach a certain height.
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Thanks Joy!
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Some story’s need more time, I often want to revisit a story after its posted. I hope that she will find love.
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I hope so too.
Thanks Michael.
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I actually love it and the tragic ending too. A lot of times, despite hope, positive outcome is not always the result.
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Very true Ameena!
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interesting take on the stair spiral! Awesome
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Thanks Samantha!
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I am feeling the story, I want it to go on and on
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Thanks Adaeze!
How have you been?
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Nice take, even if you weren’t ‘Inspired”. 🙂
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Thank you!
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I enjoyed reading your story very much and found it meaningful and thought-provoking. To be continuously wanting not just her father’s approval, but his love, is very sad. Even if she reaches that next level, his love may still not be forthcoming. In many communities worldwide, both now and in the past, that’s how it was for daughters. You’ve shown that really well. 🙂
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Awww thanks Millie.
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Personally, I think the story is done very well, especially using the staircase in the photo as a symbol of love. Creative ^_^
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Thanks Jade!
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Your story is written well for this prompt. So sad that she had to work so hard to get her father to show real love for her, only to never receive it. No child should have to endure this kind of pain. I hope she finds the right person that will love and appreciate her.
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I hope so too!
Thanks Jessie.
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I like this story. African, real life experience and the never dying hope in the young girl that she would find her father love someday. Great work.
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Thank you!
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