Adelaide sat on her portmanteau waiting for Uncle John, feasting her eyes full of the town. So many buildings in one place, not a single one short of visitors. Mama warned her off rowdy buildings and crowds. Right now that probably meant every building in sight. But mama had said nothing about fellows with shoulders like bulwarks sauntering through town as though confidence was their proverbial preserve.
He tipped his hat, she tipped weak knees.
Perhaps mama should have spent more time warning her off men whose mere presence erased every sense of geography and decorum.
Written for Friday fictioneers a writing challenge hosted by Rochelle. The picture was provided by Ted Strutz, the task is to write a 100 words story inspired by it. Thanks Rochelle for hosting the challenge. Thank you for stopping by… do click on the link to read other stories.
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Thanks Neil!
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Dear Chioma,
Oh seduction. Would she have listened if Mama had warned? Well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I doubt it.
Thanks Rochelle!
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What a great voice you have! Nicely done.
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Thanks Lore!
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Enjoyable and great use of words “He tipped his hat, she tipped weak knees.” and “erased every sense of geography and decorum” Delightful.
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Thanks Graham!
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Great story of how easily the big “city” seduces, as well as its men. I’m with Rochelle — I don’t think she would have listened even if mama had warned her. 😉
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Nope she won’t have listened.
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Thanks Joy!
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I think she may be in for a wild ride here. Mama would most certainly not approve. I liked the tone.
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Thanks Sandra!!
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She’s certainly in for some pleasant and unpleasant surprises.
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Oh, dear, trouble ahead. Mom should have given her some very pointed advice – I’d say she has a big whole in her education! A good feeling of a dazzled innocent in the big city. 🙂
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Thanks Lynn!
I doubt if any advice would have helped in that moment.
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We have to go our own way, don’t we? 🙂
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Great read! She may be getting an education she did not expect to get! Maybe her dad could have given her some advice!
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Not sure it would have helped.
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Haha. Great story, those hot guys, even then, were dangerous if you don’t know what game they’re playing with you. I guess Mama, should watch her closely.
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Thanks Mandi!
Indeed you need to know what game they are playing.
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I love this, great atmosphere and description. I hope her big adventure won’t be a big disappointment.
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I hope so too!
But there’s no telling where the adventurous heart will lead.
Thanks Gabrielle!
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Ha! I doubt she’d have listened anyway had Mama warned her off seductive men 🙂
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I doubt it too!
Thanks Draliman.
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Love the play of innocence and naivete
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Thank you!
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She definitely wouldn’t have listened. As much as we would like our children to learn from our mistakes, they mostly choose to learn through their own experience! 🙂
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Very true!
Thanks Clare.
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Funny, we were just having this sort of conversation between girlfriends recently. Very true to life story.
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LOL!
Would have loved to be a fly on the wall.
Thanks Dawn!
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who bothers about mama warnings
http://obliqview.blogspot.in/2016/08/icon-grill-prompt-ted-strutz-he-was-too.html
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We all should cos eventually we learn the hard way.
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You’ve shown her sense of wonder beautifully, and also her moment of captivation. I hope she gets some strength back in those knees soon before all is lost.
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Oh I hope so too!
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Ah, the thrill of crushes and romance.
I’ll admit that the visual image of ‘shoulders like bulwarks’ also left me quite weak at the knees. XD
In the spirit of optimism, for these two, I forsee a happy-ever-after rather than a broken heart.
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Hehehehe!
I want to be like you and wish her well but I highly doubt it. Perhaps after a little wake up call nothing too damaging.
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