Jet black home

J is for Jet black


Rolling her eyes for the ninth time “What do they think they are doing, getting all dressed, it’s just gross, how can they do this to me? It’s like they don’t care how this makes me look, I’m the teenager, I should be the one going on romantic dates not them. It’s just disgusting!” she sighed loudly.

“I don’t think it’s disgusting, I think it’s very romantic” Ashley remarked leaning on the headboard.

“That’s just it they shouldn’t be doing romantic or jazzy at their age, especially as I don’t …”

And off she went again on her ‘I’ rant.

What I wouldn’t give to have her jazzy ‘loopy’parents as she liked to refer to them in exchange for my professional-well mannered parents. Her parents brightened every room, mine painted every corner jet black with their silence and ‘educated criticism’, leaving not a smidgen of color in site. I was tired of her silly rant.

Picking up my backpack “Your parents obviously love each other, do you know anyone else at school who can say the same? 


In response to the writing challenge flash fiction for aspiring writers hosted by Priceless Joy click on the link to visit the blog. The photograph is from BarbCT/Knotholes and Textures (interesting photo can’t wait to see all the stories it inspires) and the challenge is to write a 100 – 150 words (+/- 25 words) story inspired by it. Do click on the link for other stories.

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32 thoughts on “Jet black home

  1. That sounds like teenagers, comparing each other’s parents. I feel sorry for Ashley, having parents that are so boring they paint the corners in a room “black.” The first teenager is lucky that she has parents that are in love with each other. Great story! I enjoyed reading it.

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  2. Lol. I love it from the teenager POV. I think all teenagers are embarrassed by their parents, it’s just how it is. But Ashley is very correct, many parents, divorce and split up, so she should be thankful she has parents who make time to date. Awesome job on this prompt!

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  3. Fantastic imagery — painted the corner “jet black” versus the mutual love “jazzy…brightened every room”… I can see it, feel it, and totally understand it. One of my favorites this week – thank you for sharing 🙂

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      1. You are very welcome! These seemingly small details paint a vivid picture, literally in color and texture, but in very few words. It’s not black, it’s *jet* black….and *painted* their lives. I feel the heaviness, the darkness, the weight the protagonist feels. I may be printing this one out for my writers to review in a few weeks when we discuss how details add layers to writing. Thank you again 🙂

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