C-Milky way

Aranis landed on the mountain his heart tenebrous as the clouds around him.

There had to be something worth saving. Spinning the dial Aranis steeled  himself for the unknown.

This time he landed beside a man observing a lady.

Her silhouette the spitting image of Chloris. Standing in the shadows he watched as she gently creamed her skin, he imagined it felt silky like his daffodils as he watered them each night. She was the perfect guardian for his daffodils. He would bid his time gently.

Aranis smiled, a lover watching over his desired. A glimpse of his soul had Aranis shrinking back in revulsion.

This was no lover.

PHOTO PROMPT - © Sandra Crook
PHOTO: Sandra Crook


Hi everyone, I have written this with the hopes  of making it better.

So this was an attempt to carry on last weeks story, but the picture also invoked a character whose intro can be found here. I won’t be continuing either stories here, but I hope I have slightly cleared up last weeks confusion. Please let me know your thoughts.

In response to Friday fictioneers writing challenge hosted by Rochelle.  The picture was provided by Sandra Crook and the task is to write a 100 words story inspired by it. Thanks Rochelle for hosting the challenge. Thank you for stopping by… do click on the link to read other stories.

19 thoughts on “C-Milky way

  1. I went back and read last week’s story, and the first one of the series, and now it makes more sense. If I only look at this story, he still gives off very stalkery vibes. Seen as a whole, I think, darkness is corrupting him together with everything else. Maybe he can fight against it.

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    1. Thank you for taking the time out to read the stories. I know it does come across a bit scattered. Will have to store it up somewhere for future restructuring.
      Thank you so much.
      And yes darkness has ceased his nature.


  2. I see. I thought about those daffodils slipping into the story here. I thought it was quite clever. I liked the ending of the mysterious, “This was no lover.” Great ending, but I think you should continue!

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  3. I read it a few times. I read all the comments. Then I read it again. I realized that I got lost only in that last sentence, the one hat begins with “Amaris smiled,…” I mistakenly thought he was the lover watching over his desired (new caretaker of the daffodils). That’s why the last sentence confused me. Now I see that he glimpsed into the soul of the man…and THAT was no lover. Now I enjoy it, but I did have to work harder to figure it out. Keep writing. I’ll keep reading.

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