It’s raining, the earth smells of renewing amorphous potential; makes me think of so much that can be, so much that already exists.
Wait! Does that even make any sense?
I am blushing furiously as you hold the pink brolly over me keeping me safe from the rain, the perfect gentleman.
It’s no wonder my thoughts are going all philosophical on me, something about you inspires thoughts from deep within. To see beauty where others see normal.
It’s raining, the sound of our feet falling on the lonesome path forms the perfect rhythm to a song yet unwritten.
Wait! What?
I tense my shoulders, hold the brolly to keep her safe and dry. Her hair smells of something … makes me feel good.
I feel just that bit taller that bit stronger knowing I was her choice. I am that shoulder she can lean on.
At the bus stop:
How do we say goodbye: a kiss, a hug?
A kiss on the forehead, a brief hug … a story about things untold, perfect in every way.
In response to the writing challenge flash fiction for aspiring writers hosted by Priceless Joy click on the link to visit the blog. The photograph was provided by Etol Bagam (lovely photo can’t wait to see all the stories it inspires) and the challenge is to write a 100 – 150 words (+/- 25 words) story inspired by it. Do click on the link for other stories.
Thank you for stopping by.
Love the way your story flows!
I write short stories and poems too. If you’re interested, do check out my blog 🙂
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Thanks Fariiisthaa.:-)
Will have a look at it.
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Wonderful story. Love the way you told it. And “the earth smells of renewing amorphous potential” is a fab line! 🙂
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Thanks Sonya.
XD
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Wonderful story! Two young lovers walking in the rain sharing their thoughts with us. Very nice!
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Thanks Joy.
🙂
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A perfect ending to a lovely first date! Well done.
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Thank you!
🙂
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Great job. It’s a happy story and it feels normal like everything as it should be.
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Thanks Mandi
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A lovely combination of a simple action and inner reflection. Thanks!
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Au contraire my friend it is I that should be thanking you.
Thank you for reading and for a lovely comment. XD
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Truly my pleasure. Very best wishes! TJ 🙂
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Nicely written and gives insight of one’s thoughts on a casual date. Enjoyable read. 🙂
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Thsnks Jessie 🙂
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I love your story, it’s so fluid and poetic. I like the way the thoughts of the couple are kind of mirrored. Great job 🙂
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Thank you!
XD
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Great story! I love the narrator’s “voice.”
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Should be ‘narrators’ “voices.”‘ Not sure how to edit my previous comment. Next time I should check it before posting.
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Doesn’t matter, we understood you completely.
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Thank you!
XD
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Nice story. I like that they are both happy having each other close by.
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Thanks Etol.
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