Few knew about the castle hidden inside the island. They arrived excited; ready to explore the island and discover its one true ‘treasure’ as promised in the brochure. Observing their expressions afterwards was rather entertaining:
Those over-the-hill looked like they had seen a reflection of themselves: a structure with its entire grandeur facing south, dependent on external support.
Those caught in the middle looked exactly like that: ‘caught in the middle’ upset at what their future prospects might look like: desirous to go back to the past they took for granted.
And the young, well they couldn’t even comprehend what the whole fuss was about. They spent time running around or buried face deep behind some gadget.
Sometimes I wonder if the expressions are there or simply the perceptions of an old gatekeeper.
All the same, each felt hoodwinked. At twenty euros per person to view the shell of a ‘treasure’ I would feel hoodwinked too.
Written by Chioma I.N
In response to the mondaysfinishthestory flash fiction challenge hosted by Barbara. The picture and the first sentence are provided and you have to complete the story in 100- 150 words. Click on the link to read others stories.
Thanks Barbara for providing the picture.
Thank you for stopping by.
That’s a nice reflection on aging, and a very creative use of the prompt. Maybe they shouldn’t have felt hoodwinked, but taken the opportunity to reflect in the same way.
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Thank you! 🙂 No deep thoughts can be quite unsettling a times, better to concentrate on other things.
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Very interesting take to the prompt and as Curtis said, a nice reflection on aging. I personally think that the gatekeeper’s perceptions had a lot to do with the people’s perceptions. Great story!
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Thanks Joy!
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I like the way you linked the perceptions of “treasure” to age. That was very clever.
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Thank you!
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Who you calling over the hill and I will have you know my structures are not all facing south; well only slightly and they’re still pretty cute looking actually. 🙂
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I beg your pardon madame, I won’t dare do that! LOL! Thanks for reading. 😉
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🙂
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“They spent time running around or buried face deep behind some gadget.” so true
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🙂
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I’m stuck in the middle! Very true about the young and their gadgets.
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🙂 What will the young do without them?
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Very interesting take and wonderful reflections on life!!
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Thank you!
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An interesting story, Chioma. I love the way you present the three age groups. Cleverly done. 🙂
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Thank you!
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Great take on the prompt, good descriptions of the age gap of the generations.
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Thanks Sally!
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