The price.

They say absolute power corrupts absolutely, shame whoever came up with the saying never crossed paths with me. There was not an iota of corruption in my being; I am just a guy reaping the benefits of so many dark years.

They hailed me a hero of war, but their adulation grated harshly on raw wounds. Nothing seemed to help until I discovered the gift, thanks to the nuclear explosion, I could have anything I wanted.

Desire recognised. Source identified. Mind control activated. Desire satisfied.Victim left haemorrhaging from every orifice.

A scarred face was a small price to pay for the ability to control other homo sapiens.

Back to the list:

Luxurious home by the water … check.

Private yacht …. check.  

Owners disappeared without trace.

Present need: re-constructive surgery. Best surgeon identified, shame he won’t live to appreciate his best work ever.

As with war some died, some came home …. this was my life now.

Hi everyone, had to rewrite this again for better clarity, it’s my first/second attempt at writing this so would love to hear your thoughts.

In response to the writing challenge flash fiction for aspiring writers hosted by Priceless Joy click on the link to visit the blog. The photograph was provided and the challenge is to write a 100 – 150 words (+/- 25 words) story inspired by it. Do click on the link for other stories.

Thank you Louise for the picture, thank you for stopping by.


30 thoughts on “The price.

  1. It’s great he reaped the benefits from the misfortune of others but sad that he isn’t going to live to see his best work come to fruitation. Seems the war had effected him severely. Great story! I’m wondering, in the first paragraph, if meet should be met? Thank you for participating in Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers Challenge. 🙂

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  2. I did get that from what was said about the quote that he was not corrupt but just reaping the benefits of so many dark years. So that was him saying that in his denial. Did the nuclear explosion change him to be some kind of monster? Not sure about the part about the nuclear explosion. Otherwise he came across as very ruthless, very damaged.

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  3. A very creative story. I feel sorry for this soldier because he is gaining all this stuff at the cost of people’s lives. I’m sure he went through a rough time in war, but he will never be whole again using his horrible powers. Great job!

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  4. I think it’s a great story too. It is a bit confusing at first and I had to reread. As someone said above, he has been corrupted. Maybe, if written in the First person as the voice of the protagonist it would be more clear he is in denial. Just a thought. or maybe it’s just too many pronouns? Because on the second read it all clicks into place. I especially like his list. And all his gains seem selfish, not to exact any kind of revenge just to get what he desires.

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  5. This man seems to be either totally evil (or corrupted) or else his mind has been greatly affected by the events of the war. That he should want to control all other humans is not the desire of a ‘normal’ person. Nor are all the things he does to satisfy his own, selfish desires, including murder! I assume the line about him not having a corrupt bone in his body refers to the man he was before his horrific injuries in the war, and the absolute power he gained was what totally corrupted him. 🙂

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      1. Your story was definitely a thought-provoking one this week and interpreting it was a bit of a challenge. It’s always interesting to read other commenters interpretations, which are often so different to our own.

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