Chasing trains

“So, you roll the dice and you move across the board to your next terminus. When you roll a double on the dice you get the opportunity to do something adventurous off the train this is called a window of opportunity. Depending on ….”

“Dad I don’t think this is better than the last game you came up with,” said Simon.

“It’s too complicated and would take ag..gggesss to win. Plus it seems boring,” Angie interjected.

“Sorry dad, but I don’t think trailing trains would ever leave this station. Besides most people prefer computer games,” Simon continued.

“Speak for yourself Simon, I love board games expect for this one, it’s too nerdy,” replied Angie dragging Simon by the arm out of the garage.

He was starting to run out of steam and innovative ideas; maybe it was time to throw in the towel, time to accept his name like his train games would never leave the shores of his home-town.

Written by Chioma I.N

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33 thoughts on “Chasing trains

      1. When I’m doing dialogue, I try to put myself in the minds of the characters so I can write what they might actually say. Then I read it back to make sure it sounds natural.

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    1. Thank you! I am new to writing and would like some insight on how to draw out my characters, how to keep people intrigued without putting all the info out there. Any tips would be helpful.


      1. I’ve only been writing for a few months I’m afraid! All I know is that I’ve benefitted from writing regularly and entering challenges but also to listening to the comments (specially those that give advice and point out my errors). There is a wealth of advice available on the web (Search Creative Writing in Google). Good luck! From what I read you are off to an excellent start.

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      1. I’m sorry, I cannot answer this because I am new to writing. I will search for the answer and let you know what I find. Are you talking about writing a character out of a story or write out a character – to expand on this person within a story?

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      2. How does each of your characters talk? The answer will depend on:

        Geographic background (a Texan doesn’t speak the same as a Bostonian)

        Educational level

        Age (Like, is your character, like, a total teenager?)

        Personality (Is your character nervous, impulsive, aggressive, flirtatious, shy?)

        Your character’s relationship with the person she’s speaking with. She wouldn’t talk to her boss the same way she speaks to a friend or to her five-year-old son.

        Your character’s attitude to the conversation topic. Does it make him nervous, proud, defensive? Would he rather avoid the subject all together?

        This is what I found on Google and I have to say I agree with it. I typed this: Creative Writing/ how to write your character out. Of course, there is a lot more information than this but I thought this was a good starting point.

        You are not bother me. It’s an opportunity for me to learn to. 🙂

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  1. Youngsters nowadays are rarely into board games. The computer game is here to stay. Yet years ago, board games were so much a part of family life, especially at holiday times. I spent hours playing Monopoly, and simpler/quicker games like Snakes and Ladders and Ludo, too. It’s sad they aren’t popular any more.
    I noticed your comment to Ali, above, about dialogue, Chioma. One important thing when writing it, is to give your characters mannerisms. A girl could make a comment whilst idly brushing back her long black hair, or screwing her pert little nose in dislike. Use mannerisms that either give us an idea of what the characters look like, or how they feel. ‘Idly brushing back her hair, for instance, gives us the impression thst she’s bored, or vain. I think PJ’s given a good long list of things. Try some of them out. 🙂

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  2. That sounds like exactly the type of board game my nephew would adore! He’s obviously just not found his ideal market! Some of the best games I know have complex rules. 🙂
    I thought I’d just add to what Millie says about giving your characters mannerisms. You can often do this instead of using speech tags. For example, instead of writing ‘“Dad I don’t think this is better than the last game you came up with,” said Simon.’ you could write ‘“Dad I don’t think this is better than the last game you came up with.” Simon rolled his eyes.’ The use of the action after the speech reveals both who the speaker is and a little bit extra about their personality. Too many speech tags can become a little monotonous to read. I hope this helps. 🙂

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  3. I like your story…it is the typical reaction of what a child would say to their parent today…since they are so involved in electronic type games. The dad needs to consider something a little more high tech, but that probably isn’t something he is ready to do. 🙂

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