“The cemetery spread along the area known as Devils Abode, many decades after and the area still reflects its name. A deprived area with the highest crime rates in the district, some people have gone as far as believing that residents from the cemetery have something to do with it.”
“You don’t think so.”
“Of-course I don’t think so. The area has been abandoned by the government for years, they’ve turned it to a site for dropping off derelicts and social rejects. What do you expect?”
“There’s talk about a renaming of the area, people are saying its bound to bring change.”
“Boy I’ve lived through different versions of promised change and this one has to be the most laughable. A name change is like putting plaster over a bullet wound without treatment; it ain’t gonna change nothing.”
“So glad I don’t live in their time; it’s a nightmare just watching them try to fight an inevitable end.”
Written by Chioma I.N
In response to the mondaysfinishthestory flash fiction challenge hosted by Barbara. The picture and the first sentence are provided and you have to complete the story in 100- 150 words. Click on the link to read others stories.
Thanks Barbara for hosting it and for the picture.
Thank you for stopping by.
Wonderful take. Loved this line – A name change is like putting plaster over a bullet wound without treatment…
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Nice twist about the ghosts.
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Thank you.
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Nice take on the prompt.
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~i like how you used the prompt 😀 nicely written!!
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Thank you.
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Great story! Written very well.
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Thanks Joy
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I bet they have seen a lot. Promised change via a name change usually isn’t enough, but who knows, there’s always hope! Well done!
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Thanks Yolanda.
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I agree with Shivangi on that one line. Well done! Thanks for writing again for the Mondays Finish the Story challenge. Be well… ^..^
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Well done… great angle with the ghosts observing all!
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Thank you!
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It’s amazing how often people change the name of something in the hopes that it will suddenly turn good.
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True, it never really works. Like washing the outsides of a cup whilst leaving the interior dirty. Thanks for reading.
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This sentence (“So glad I don’t live in their time; it’s a nightmare just watching them try to fight an inevitable end.” ) makes me think perhaps lessons have been learned from passed history, and it was found that just changing a name will not work….real changes have to be made to correct the problem and it is being done in the ..present time. Good story/great lesson!
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Thank you so much Jessie.
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I love that it’s a pair of ghosts talking. 🙂 They’re right in that a name change will do little to help but I’m sure it can’t be an entirely bad thing – a name like ‘Devil’s Abode’ definitely invites greater negativity to the area!
I hope you don’t mind me pointing out that your punctuation needs a little work. When writing speech, it should only be a comma within the speech marks if there’s a speech tag (i.e. he said, she said) afterwards. It should be a full stop if there is no tag or if you then describe an action.
“Hello.”
“Hello,” he said.
“Hello.” He walked over.
I hope this helps. 🙂
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Ahhh! Thanks Louise that helps a lot.
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🙂
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I think I understand it, made some corrections, but If you can have a look again I would really appreciate it.
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It all looks good now. 🙂
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A wonderful take on the prompt Chioma ~ I also love this brilliant line within your great story;
“A name change is like putting plaster over a bullet wound without treatment…”
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Thanks John.
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