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They had traced his movements across the county over the last three months, he had eluded them so far but today was the day to set the records straight …

“… All systems on alert, target is approaching the entrance, wearing a black/red bronx baseball hat, seems slightly agitated … ”

“…. Target identified and within range … ”

“… Do not approach the target, I repeat do not approach the target. Area too dense, stay with him and don’t let him out of sight. We need the target alive … ”

“…. His heading towards the other end, Drisco look out for the target … ”

“… Target identified and …”

“.. Mummy I want the Olaf balloon, I want Olaf …. ” Casey requested in a sing song whine typical of a four year old.

“…. How much is the balloon?”

“… Target is a few steps from you, get rid of the lady….”

“…Sorry lady It’s not for sale, please move away …”

“But …”

“… lady please move along …” Drisco replied in a cold stiff voice. The target was within range, it was now or never…

Written by Chioma I.N

In response to the writing challenge flash fiction for aspiring writers hosted by Priceless Joy click on the link to visit the blog. The photograph was provided and we are challenged to write a 100 – 150 words (+/- 25 words) story inspired by it. Do click on the link for other stories.

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13 thoughts on “cache 22

  1. Excellent! Great tension build up! Then, the child wanting to buy a balloon – I felt sorry for her. Great ending! If you don’t mind I do need to point out a typo. In the 5th paragraph, the sentence, “His heading towards…” should probably be, “He’s heading towards the other end, Drisco look out for the target…” Loved your story and thank you for participating in FFfAW challenge!


  2. I’m thinking that a balloon seller was not the best choice of disguise! Good, tension filled story. Just thought I’d point out, if its the Frozen snowman the child wants, his name is Olaf, not Olfa. 🙂

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  3. An exciting little scene. I like the build-up of tension, with the target coming into range and being identified … and then the child wanting the Olaf balloon and getting in the way… Well done with that. 🙂
    (Check your left-hand speech marks, Chioma. Most of them are back to front).

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